It’s Friday again, so you know what that means! It’s #FirstLineFriday, my weekly ritual that’s becoming a blogging trend.
Now if you’re unfamiliar with #FirstLineFriday, here are the rules should you wish to do this on your blog (and I highly encourage you try it, it’s a whole lot of fun):
- Title a post on your own blog #FirstLineFriday, hashtag and all
- Explain the rules like I’m doing
- Post the first one or two lines of a potential story, a story-in-progress, or a completed or published story.
- Ask your readers for feedback.
So I really don’t have a source for this opening. It just sort of came to me in the bathroom the other day (as ideas are sometimes known to do) and I thought I’d roll with it as my #FirstLineFriday entry. So without further ado, enjoy:
Gerry’s cousin, who had seen a number of therapists in his lifetime, had told him that you could often tell a lot about a shrink by how they decorated their offices. Gerry looked at the mishmash of science-fiction posters, the African tribal masks, and philosophy tomes around Dr. Greer’s office and wondered what that said about her.
What do you guys think? interesting opening? Any problems that could use fixing? Let’s discuss in the comments below.
And if you’d like to try #FirstLineFriday on your blogs, please do. Just let me know when you post it so I can check it out.
That’s all for now. I’ll try to get a post or two out this weekend if I can, if I’m not too busy with life, so keep an eye out for them. Have a good one, my Followers of Fear!
Rami Ungar The Writer 
Great opening!
Thank you!
Hmmm. That is an interesting mismatch and a great opening!
Thanks. If I were to pursue this story, I’d slowly reveal both why he’s seeing the therapist and why the therapist has such an odd assortment of decorations in her office.
It sounds good! I hope you do 🙂
If I find a story for it, sure!
Hey Rami, I really like this opening. It’s intriguing. I wonder why Gerry (and his cousin) are seeking therapy, and why the therapist seems to have such an odd assortment of decorations. The only critique I have is that the first sentence seems a little wordy. Can you tell us that Gerry’s cousin has seen a lot of therapists in fewer words? Maybe even bring that into the second or third sentence. Or, if his cousin isn’t really crucial to the plot, leave out his cousin entirely, and just say that Gerry heard, assumed, or knew that décor tells a lot about a therapist. I look forward to seeing what you come up with in this one!
Some form of it might appear in a story one day. I don’t have any stories that include this opening right now, but you never know. Thanks for the feedback, Adan.