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Last night I was reading a manga, and something happened in it that I wanted to discuss with you (I doubt anyone will mind if I give a few spoilers to this manga, I’m the only guy I know who reads all the same stuff as myself):

In this manga, a character who’d been characterized so far as a sweet, polite young lady from an upper class background suddenly showed up at a battle on the highway riding a motorcycle and wearing a skintight, black leather riding outfit, recorded some damning evidence on her phone, and then started acting like she knew more about some of the futuristic weapons than the more veteran fighters did, and had the proof to back up the claim when she joined the battle. I was like, “Okay, she’s barely been a part of this war for a day; how the heck does she know more about the weapons than the veterans who’ve been fighting since the beginning of the manga? More importantly, why is she dressed like the T-Mobile spokesperson and acting like Tomb Raider meets Japanese schoolgirl when so far she’s been nothing like that?”

So I read on, and it’s revealed that this particular character has a very unexpected and very scary connection to the main villain of the series, a mad doctor character who set the two sides in the war against each other without really taking part in the war himself (now that’s evil and amazing at the same time). Not only that, but because she had to hide that connection between the villain and herself, the super-sweet personality she’d been showing so far had all been an act meant to fool everyone. And it worked!

It made me think, “This character had been acting against her character type at the beginning of this scene, but as soon as this revelation makes it seem totally within character.” In fact, it made me do a lot of thinking about characters in fiction acting unlike themselves. Sure, I’ve seen characters start as good but later go down the path of darkness, but there’s been vestiges of the good in them in how they act while being evil or how they rationalize their evil deeds. Anakin Skywalker said he brought peace to the galaxy in Episode III though he did it by murder, the Assassin from the movie Serenity was using evil means to create a perfect world, and other such examples show how good shines through the evil.

I’ve only seen a few of these unexpected-character-changes in my life though, and each time I’ve seen them, it’s always been alongside a major revelation, such as the character was working for the antagonist the whole time, or perhaps she’s from the future and is having some difficulties distinguishing reality from her psychosis, or something along those lines. And usually after the reader learns this shocking revelation, the main character of the story does too, which can lead to them becoming enemies, friends, or a whole bunch of other combinations, and it usually stays that way until the end of the story, when the conflict is finally resolved. In the case of the manga I was reading, I’d say it’s a fair chance there’s going to be an ongoing tension between this character and the main character for a while, especially since the character with the connection to the villain is supposed to be a good guy and is the object of the main character’s affections (that’s a sad betrayal waiting to happen).

Have you ever seen this sort of character revelation? If so, where have you seen it and how did you react?

Don’t e shy, I’d love to hear from you. In the meantime, I’m going to try and find out when the next volume of that manga comes out. I mean seriously, I have to know how the main character reacts to finding out his crush is related to the main villain! It’s going to bug me for a while.

Well, it’s been a while since I’ve written about my serial killer thriller Snake, which is about a serial killer hunting down the members of a mafia family in New York City. But yes, as you can tell from the title, I’m working on the second draft. I’m happy to say, I’m getting through it rather speedily, clearing through fourteen chapters in a little less than twenty-four hours. Then again, most of the chapters are less than ten pages, so the fact that I’ve only cleared fourteen chapters in a single day may earn me some accusations of laziness.

Moving on.

So, I’ve gone through fourteen chapters, and so far it’s mostly been polishing up phrasing and grammar. Yes, there have been entire sections of the story that have been rewritten so far, but only one or two, and those entire sections have been small. I’ve also noticed some inconsistencies in what I’ve written at certain points and what I’ve written at certain other points, so I’ve been correcting that when I’ve seen it.

But I’m happy with what I have so far. The entire novel is ninety-something chapters, but I think if I work hard and don’t get too distracted, I should be done in a week or two (thank goodness spring break is coming up). Wish me luck, and I’ll keep you posted on my progress.

TQG cover

This evening I looked over the last two short stories in the order I’ll put them in the final book, and I had to smile at myself: In a little over two-and-a-half months, I’ve written five short stories, had them edited and critiqued, created a book trailer, and now I’ve gone over all five of them and done my final edits on them. In addition, I wrote some notes after each short story, explaining some of what I wanted to accomplish when I was writing the short stories and where the inspiration for each of them came from. It was thrilling thinking about the journey I’ve taken since December when winter break started, and seeing myself here and now.

The only thing left to do is to turn all the files into PDF format, and combine them so that I can send them to the US Copyright Office (and the sooner the better for that one; it seems that the US Copyright Office takes a long time to get your submissions processed and issue you a copyright, even when you do it electronically). After I get the copyright, I’ll upload The Quiet Game: Five Tales To Chill Your Bones onto the Internet as an e-book, and share it all with you!

At this point, I’d like to once again thank those who inspired my work–Caitlin Kelly, my friend J, the people who created the film The Possession, and the Ghost Adventures crew–along with the people who critiqued my work–Marc Neiwirth, my creative writing class, Jason Alan, Enjie Hall, and Rabbi Wendy Warren Ungar–and along with all those whose encouragement has helped me to create this collection. You’ve been keeping me going, and you’ll keep me going until I run out of ideas for things to write, which probably won’t be anytime soon.

Now, if you’ll excuse me, I’d like to take a break to work on a certain serial killer novel that’s been waiting for me. Have a good night, everybody.

Well, I finished “Fugue”, and I liked how it turned out. It’s a little longer than I expected, but I’m happy with it and I achieved what I wanted with it, which is the story of what happens when a very shy girl wakes up from a dissociative fugue, totally freaks out, and then finds out what sort of life she’s been living while she was in the fugue state.

The story took me about a week or so to write, with plenty of challenging aspects to it, such as how to put the main character through as much s%^t as possible without seeming sadistic or making the story seem unrealistic. I stuck with it though and had plenty of support. Plus the story itself was interesting to me, so I was able to get through it all without losing interest or getting disheartened.

Now I plan on sending it to two beta readers. One’s my Abnormal Psychology professor, who expressed an interest in the story when I told her about it. The other is an old teacher of mine, whom I think might be very interested in the story and may have some suggestions for me on how to improve the story. I hope he says he’ll read it, I have a feeling he’ll like it.

Wish me luck with all that’s coming. In addition to editing “Old Sid” and starting the second draft of “Snake”, I’m going to be working on getting “The Quiet Game” out on the digital bookshelves by April 30th, when the semester ends. Add in school and work, and Rami Ungar’s a very busy boy. Thank God spring break is coming!

This evening, my creative writing class critiqued the second short story I submitted tot he class, “Old Sid”, about the subject of a fictional urban legend on Ohio State’s campus (by this, I mean I made up the urban legend). I was praised a lot on how my narrators gathered their testimony, and on how I captured the many apsects of the legend.

However, there were some thoughts on how the story could be improved. The most dramatic but necessary change was something I hadn’t even thought about: making the legend real. You see, every story with a Boo Radley has the Boo Radley character begin a legend and then become human at the end. I never did that for Old Sid, but I see that I can do that in the second draft and have a ton of fun with it while I’m at it.

I’ll also flesh out the narrators of the story and give them a little background as well, and then I’ll see if I can get the story off a tangent it goes on midway through the story. It’ll be awesome! I just have to finish “Fugue” first; I’m so close to finishing that short story, I can taste it on my tongue, and I’m not delaying that when I’m dealing with two really awesome short stories.

Wish me luck. I’ve got a first draft to finish tonight.

TQG cover

I’m very happy to announce that in only two hours, I managed to complete the trailer for The Quiet Game: Five Tales To Chill Your Bones. I would like to thank the staff of Ohio State’s Digital Union for answering all my questions on iMovie and for helping me gather the photos and clips I needed.

The video was created using iMovie, and featured clips from YouTube videos, Google Images, and my own book cover. It features music I scrounged up on the Internet, and the sound effects were from iMovie’s sound effects database. I’m very proud of this video, particularly because a year ago I could not imagine myself making this sort of video. Thankfully I learned how to use all sorts of programs last semester, so now I feel a little less helpless using such programs.

So without further ado, I would like to introduce the official book trailer to The Quiet Game: Five Tales To Chill Your Bones. Feel free to share it on Facebook or on your own blog or wherever you would like to share it.

The Quiet Game will be coming out soon and will be available for $1.29 when it does. Please wait until then for it. Thanks for watching.

TQG cover

Today my beta reader for one of the short stories gave me his feedback on “Samson Weiss’s Curse”, the dybbuk story that’ll be featured in The Quiet Game: Five Tales To Chill Your Bones. At this time, that means I can draw the illustrations that’ll be going into the story and assemble it into it’s final format, which I’ll submit to the US Copyright Office before uploading onto the Internet.

I would like to thank all my beta readers–my creative writing class, Jason Alan, Marc Neiwirth, Enjie Hall, and my mother Wendy Warren Ungar, for taking time out of their busy schedules to read my work and give me feedback and criticisms. Your contributions are immeasurable and I hope to someday repay the favor.

Although that doesn’t mean I’ll be supporting you in old age, Mom. You’ve already got a wonderful person at your side for that!

I can’t remember where I heard it (might’ve been from my Creative Writing teacher, who’s a published literary novelist with tenure), but someone once told me that all fiction starts with a single character getting into a whole heap of trouble and then reacting to that trouble or trying to find some way to extricate themselves from it. In many cases, that’s all you need for a compelling plot. And so it is the case for my latest short story, Fugue, which is about a girl waking up from a fugue state to realize she’s not in Kansas anymore and she’s in big trouble.

Well actually she’s from a small town in rural Virginia somewhere between Richmond and Charlottesville, but you get what I’m going for here.

The point is, I’m trying to put my main character through so much grief and fear without being sadistic about it and without causing suspension of belief. The start of her trouble is the fact that she woke from the fugue state instead of the fugue itself. When one wakes from a fugue state, they’re confused, they’re scared, and they have no idea that they’ve just spent a great deal of time (in this case, several months) living as someone else, and have no memory of the incident. With that in mind, I’m delaying resolving the character’s problems and allowing her to figure out what happened to her while I try to make an interesting story based on the things that are happening to her immediately following her awakening.

Or to be simpler, I’m trying to see how much s%^t I can put the poor girl through before I have to resolve the plot and get to where this whole thing will eventually conclude. Which is a tough balance, seeing as I’m trying not to make things too easy for this character. On the other hand, I want to make sure readers don’t get annoyed by it all and want to stop reading because there’s no resolution.

So what’s the best way to go about doing this balancing act? You tell me. In any case, this is the first draft, so there will be room for mistakes. However I must try to get this done by the end of the week, because I’ll be starting edits on Snake when March begins, and I don’t want to delay too much.

Which means I should probably stop blogging and get back to getting this girl to her next point of conflict. Wish me luck.

Well, I did the reading last night, and I’m very happy with the results. Not a lot of people showed up–about ten at most–but they seemed to like it, and several friends of mine and some lookey-loos who just lived in the building showed up, which made me happy.

I started the show with a friend on the building’s activity board playing some creepy mood music from a Marilyn Manson album before stopping the song. Then I came out from behind the audience wearing make-up to make me look like Heath Ledger’s Joker and laughing like a madman. It freaked several people out, which was the reaction I was going for (I don’t have a photo of it right now, but I’ll be sure to post a photo of it later on The Quiet Game‘s Facebook page, the address of which is below). I proceeded to read from small sections from all but one of the short stories (you might remember that one of them is about a recovering sex addict, so I couldn’t read from that), and some people were a little creeped out by what I read to them.

Afterwards I thanked everyone who helped put the show together, and I thanked everyone who came for attending and sticking around, before telling everyone where they could find out more about The Quiet Game. It was nice, and I really enjoyed myself. It’s part of the song-and-dance that writers, especially self-publishing writers, have to do in order to make their work heard and bought and read and possibly reviewed on Amazon. So hopefully they’ll buy a copy after the book comes out, maybe tell their friends about it. That’s what I hope, anyway.

So for all those who managed to come, thanks for showing. It really meant a lot to me, and I hope that at future readings, you can show up and maybe not be too freaked out by anything that might be on my face besides my glasses.

Good night everybody.

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A Stubborn Short Story

Posted: February 21, 2013 in short story, Writing
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We’ve all heard of authors who’ve written stories over a period of years, famous works the authors have written over periods of years, taking long breaks that have lasted decades. Benjamin Franklin did it with his memoir; Mark Twain did it with Huckleberry Finn; and I have a friend, a published thriller writer who’s been working on something for several years, but has written it on and off, when the inspiration strikes her.

I’ve heard of all this, but only for novels and memoirs. Never for short stories!

And yet this is what’s happening with my demonic-possession-gone-wrong story; I started it today, got a few pages in, and then I couldn’t do a thing with it. What gives? I have no idea, but I just can’t work anymore on this story. And I have no idea if it’s me losing interest in the story or the story not wanting to form at this very moment under these current conditions or some combination of the two.

And yes, I realize I’m making the story itself seem like a living, breathing being with will and defiance to my own will, but that’s what it feels like.

Suffice to say, I’ll take a break from this short story, though hopefully not for years. Maybe I’ll come back to it in a few days or weeks, and work on it bit by bit. If I can, I’ll make it into one of the best short stories I’ve ever written.

In the meantime, I have plenty of other stuff to work on. In fact, there’s a story about a dissociative fugue I can start on possibly tomorrow, if I can get my homework done before the Sabbath. Wish me luck.

Oh, and by the way, has this ever happened to you, with any sort of creative work?