Or to be more precise, the number of chapters fall and the number of chapters fall.

I wrote a couple posts back that I’d decided to change the way the main characters of Reborn City met up with the big bad guys, so that meant tacking on another chapter. I wasn’t sure if the number of chapters would rise again or if it would drop. Wouldn’t you know it? I ended up deleting a chapter that was unnecessary with the new course of the story (which I’m glad I went with; the story’s much better this way). So I’m back to twenty-four chapters, including a nice little epilogue.

And speaking of which, I’m in the middle of editing chapter twenty-one. I’m in the home stretch, and much sooner than I expected. Who knows, if my friend who’s agreed to look over RC after it’s done (you know who you are) gets through it quickly, I might be able to get the e-book out…December or January. Either way it works out wonderfully, because RC takes place in mid-summer. When we’re freezing our butts off in the middle of winter, it’ll be nice to sit back with our e-reader and read about a gang war with a conspiracy behind it in the middle of July, right?

Hope to have more soon. Wish me luck as I do the final edits.

Review: Taken 2

Posted: October 14, 2012 in Review
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THE FOLLOWING REVIEW CONTAINS SPOILERS. PLEASE BE AWARE YOU MAY NOT WANT TO SEE THE MOVIE AFTER READING THIS POST.

Before I start, I just want to say one thing: I loved Taken. I loved Liam Neeson in that movie (he’s great in every movie I’ve seen him in, but he’s especially amazing here), I thought the story was amazing, the action was fresh and awesome, and the movie helped inspire my serial killer Snake.

So I feel a little sad that I have to write this review, and a little disappointed that the makers of Taken 2 couldn’t top Taken. In fact, they did several things that just sapped the excitement from the film and made it boring. For instance, the opening of the movie would’ve looked more at home in a sci-fi film about a conspiracy than the sequel of a thriller involving lots of shooting and killing. And then when they show the funeral, they make it explicitly clear that it’s an Islamic funeral while the antagonist vows revenge for his fallen friends. Seriously, I get that Albania’s mostly Muslim, but could you wait until after the funeral to discuss your evil plans? Or did you want the racist freaks out there to nod and say, “That’s just what Muslims do at funerals”?

Second, the action just seemed a little too…familiar. Even if Liam Neeson gets captured and beaten a little, it’s all the same, shoot people up in a foreign place, take them all by surprise, end up with very few wounds by the end of the film. And what was with the end of that bad guy? Honestly, you just kill him after offering to let him go. Makes no sense to me; I would’ve done it differently.

Unfortunately, this movie’s doing well at the box office, so perhaps some people disagree with me. However, I’m calling it as I see it, and I see this film as a 1.4 out of 5. Yes, that low! Hopefully when I see Alex Cross next week, they’ll be able to do a better job of doing a thriller than the makers of Taken 2, even if they’re not including the character of John Sampson in the former.

I saw an ad for Google Chrome today that I wanted to share with you. Normally I wouldn’t waste your time with a Google Chrome ad, especially since Internet Explorer is more my type. But this one has to do with a self-publishing success story:

In the video, Clayton Dallas wrote a children’s book for his son that encouraged him to dream big. Mr. Dallas wanted to publish his book, but publishers turned him down. He decided to do self-publishing, and over time, his book, titled An Awesome Book, caught on. Before he knew it, Mr. Dallas was touring the country and abroad, reading his book about how any child can change the future if they put their minds to it.

Well, that’s pretty interesting. Not only am I self-publishing Reborn City, but one of the overarching themes of RC and its two sequels is that one can better their lives and change the world if they work hard and they put their minds to it and never give up. I like that idea, and I think it’s one that not enough people believe in these days, and many people put down all too willingly, which may be why it can be difficult sometimes to get people to vote in elections (a possibility).

So Mr. Dallas, I wish you luck with your book. I hope it inspires a whole new generation of young people. As for myself, I’ll work to get my book out too, and maybe somebody will be inspired enough to try and make a change after reading RC and its sequels (fingers crossed).  I also hope that if publishing companies haven’t taken your book seriously yet, then after the Google Chrome commercial they are! Otherwise, they are just dense.

Talk to you guys later. I’ve got some homework to do and then I’m going to see Taken 2, which I’ll review afterwards. Spoiler alert: Someone gets taken and Liam Neeson has to go save them. But we already knew that, didn’t we?

Yesterday before the Sabbath came in and I became cut off from all electronic devices (including anything I use to edit my stories), I had a great idea on how to edit Reborn City‘s final act. I realize that the original scenario was a little unrealistic, a little in need of suspension of belief. Or maybe a lot in need.

So this new scenario will be much better. I’m not sure if it’ll increase or cut the number of chapters I have, but that doesn’t matter, when it comes to producing a quality story, right?

I’m excited to see what this produces, so I’l write you again when I have something to write. In the meantime–on to the editing and rewriting!

5000 Views! A Big Milestone

Posted: October 13, 2012 in Living and Life
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You like me, you really like me!

Yes, I’ve finally gotten past 5000 views on Rami Ungar the Writer. It’s been a year, 2 months, a week, and two days since I started this blog. There were times when no one visited my blog at all, and I worried I wasted my time writing it. Thanks to everyone who’s stuck with me or logged on or even just strayed here accidentally looking for a picture of a creepy doll or information on whether Alex Cross’s partner John Sampson would be in the new movie (he’s not). It means a lot, and I hope you stick with me while I work to publish my novel Reborn City and work to become a professional novelist.

To all, thank you.

You know, I just love calling these little posts about how my semester is going “half-time reports.” Must be my love of Ohio State football.

Now, onto how I’m doing. Like I’ve said in previous posts, I’m taking a creative writing class, and we’re all currently in the middle of critiquing everybody’s stories (mine’s being turned in early November). I’m enjoying that and doing well grade-wise, though last night I read one of my classmates’ stories and thought it was horrible, though don’t tell any of my classmates I said that. I’m also taking a documentary course, which I’m also doing well in, and which I have to thank for empowering me to self-publish my novel Reborn City without having to rely on a service. After all, I’ve learned to use GarageBand and iMovie. Who says I can’t learn to format my novel as an e-book?

I’m also taking a history course, and got one assignment and my midterm back yesterday. The assignment, which was for us to watch a documentary and then evaluate the historical sources used in the documentary, didn’t have a specific letter grade on it, but judging by the feedback my teacher gave me, I got at least a B+, probably and A- for going over the sources and seeing how biased against Leopold II of Belgium they were. My midterm was even better, with 92% correct answers. In addition, even the answers that were wrong got partial credit, so I’m happy about that.

I’m also taking a philosophy course on statistics, which fulflills a GEC requirement. I didn’t do so well on the initial quizzes, but I’ve been studying hard and meeting with my teacher outside of class to discuss problems I’ve been having with the coursework, and as a result my grades have gone up a lot. Hopefully I’ll be able to keep this up and get even better grades on the quiz a week from now.

Other than that, not much else to report: I watch Buckeye games every Saturday with a few good friends (we’re 6-0 right now, and I’m hoping we beat Indiana this week, if we can keep our defense strong and our offense stronger), I edit Reborn City, and I store up a few ideas for short stories that I’ll do once I have the time to do them.

Wish me luck with the rest of the semester. We only have 8 weeks to go, and that’s not including the two weeks devoted to finals (somehow I only have one final to do, and it’s on the last day of exams, in philosophy. How the heck does that even happen in your first semester?). Hoping to get all A’s this semester, keep our fingers crossed.

Oh, and before I forget, have a great weekend. Go Bucks!

I just finished editing chapter twelve of Reborn City, officially putting me halfway through the editing process before I hand it off to someone to look at. Most of the chapters have already had three or four drafts, but as I look over each and every chapter, I see pieces that could be polished a little, where the phrasing is a little awkward or where something doesn’t make sense. It’s been something fixing these over, but I’ve been able to make some improvements and I’m seeing the story I started in high school slowly becoming better and better.

Speaking of which, Reborn City was written from my sophomore year to my senior year of high school (I took long breaks as necessary for school work, short story projects, a summer in Israel, and sometimes when I was just too exhausted to write and just wanted to enjoy someone else’s work for a change). I can still see some of my writing style from when I was in high school in the words I wrote then, and it’s pretty different from my current voice. I guess you can attribute that to the fact that I’ve gotten some life experience, so of course my voice changed a bit.

But anyway, I’m happy with the progress I’ve made. I’m still not sure when Reborn City will be available for download as an e-book yet,  but I hope it’ll be by mid-March by next year, if I can get these edits done quickly and I can get my publishing press set up without too much trouble.

I’ll let you guys know when chapters 13-23 and the epilogue are edited. Stay tuned for more!

“God, I love what you’ve written. I do have some thoughts though…first off, can we maybe have less commandments? Twenty-seven’s a little much to remember and recite!”

For the first half of my creative writing class this semester, we’ve been going over some of the fundamentals of writing fiction, including plot, dialogue, and characters, among other things. We’ve also been told to each write a shorty story between 8 and 20 pages, or 2,000 and 5,000 words, and while I certainly had trouble writing my story, mostly because it’s literary, I’ve been enjoying reading and critiquing the stories of my classmates.

We’ve actually only read 4 stories so far, but they’ve all been interesting in their own way. There was a story about the rivalry between two princes, a vignette about a day in the life of a soldier, a crime story, and even one involving a virtual reality game. And later today we’re recieving a new story, so I’m wondering what that’s going to be about.

After we read the story, we have to type up a critique in the form of a letter and hand it in to both our teacher and the writer of the story in question. We also give our impressions orally to the writer during class, allowing them to absorb some more feedback before they start editing their story. Although I like getting critiqued myself (because I want to know what problems my stories have and what I can do to fix them), it’s another story entirely to critique someone else’s work (pun intended). I like the feeling of helping someone improve a story they wrote, especially if the story is good. And it’s different from when I look over my own work, because I’m not looking at my classmates’ work with a biased eye.

I’ll be turning in my own story for critiquing in early November, a few days before my science-fiction short story “Ripple” is set to hit the web. Between now and then, I’ll go over my story and do a few edits before I turn it in, because I like to give my short stories an edit or two before I turn them in for critiquing by anyone. But for now, I’ll just sit back, get my homework done, and critique other people’s work.

What about you? Have you ever been critiqued or critiqued someone else’s work? How does it feel when you do?

Isn’t that the most winning smile? Too bad I didn’t take it with my own camera.

Unfortunately, I have no photos. Well, I do, but they were taken from a great distance with a camera that’s better suited for close-range shots. So all I have are some grainy images that are a little shaky. So, instead of showing you those, I decided to go with a stock photo from Google Images (above).

Okay, so President Obama’s speech at OSU. I’m assuming you wanted to know the details, since you’re reading this post. Well, I got into line around 1, which extended around Thompson Library, across the street to Lazenby Hall, around the corner from that, and heading back to whatever’s beyond that. I entered line around the driveway for delivery trucks into Lazenby. There I saw a few friends whom I allowed to cut in line, and the usual pro-life protesters who always look like they just got back from a hunting party or tailgating. Around 2 the line started moving, and I bought a decorative press pass from a vendor.

When we got to the Oval, where the speech would take place, we were halfway between Orton Hall, where Obama would be speaking, and University Hall, which was where everybody was entering and getting their bags checked. In short, I was in the middle of the crowd, which is why I got bad photos. In addition, everybody kept moving around, so at times I was getting squished by people saying “Excuse me” and shoving me and everyone else around them. Plus the weather decided to be like early September, so I’m a little sunburned.

But besides that, everything was great. First Mayor Michael Coleman of Columbus came on and gave a little warm-up speech. Then we had the Pledge of Alliegance and the National Anthem. Some students, including one I knew from volunteering, made some speeches on how Obama’s policies were helping them get the education they needed. Senators John Glenn and Sherrod Brown also made speeches, which I thought were very good, though I thought Senator Brown said something that might come back to haunt him later: “If you’re here at this rally, it shows you are more knowledgeable about politics than your friends or family.” That’s paraphrased for brevity’s sake, but you can see why some might have a problem with that statement.

And then will.i.am, one of the Black Eyed Peas. showed up and started DJ-ing for the whole crowd, using his songs and others. It was an awesome time, awesome enough that we forgave him for DJ-ing from a small blue tent where no one from the audience could see him. After that, President Obama came out!

He stood up there, told us how important Ohio was, and how because of the auto bailout, 1 in 8 Ohio jobs were now automotive-related jobs. He also spoke about other policies of his that had benefited the American people, backed up his sayings with statistics, used examples from people he’d met on the campaign trail, and compared his plan for the future with Mitt Romney’s plan. He also brought up Big Bird, which got plenty of laughs from the audience (I swear, Governor Romney is never going to live that down).

All in all, it was a pretty good day. I may have stood for several hours, which brought up back pain, but I feel inspired and I’m so glad I voted about a week before the rally. And I bet a lot of other people felt inspired too, because after the rally there were buses that could take you to vote early, which many people got on (of course, they may have gotten on just because will.i.am was supposed to be DJ-ing there too, but I’m an optimist).

So that’s my day. And if you’re American and registered to vote, I urge you to do so, no matter who you’re supporting this election (though you know who I hope will win the election). Your vote counts, despite what you may think about voting in masses, and when you make your voice heard, you get the right to complain whenever something happens in Washington you don’t like.

Happy 30 days or so till Election Day, everybody.

Did you know the name Barack means “lightning” in Hebrew? So that means the President is “Lightning Obama”. Why do people say his name would be “Baruch” if he were Jewish?

Yes, President Barack Obama is coming to OSU today. This will be his third time visiting Ohio State in the past couple of months, so I’m super-excited that he’s coming this time. Why, you ask? Because this time I’ll actually going to be able to see and hear him speak! The first time I was working, so no way I could go; the second time I didn’t even know he was on campus, which I blame on lack of advertising; but the third time, it’s less than a month from election day and will.i.am’s supposed to open the darn thing, and no one’s sure if he’s giving a speech or a free concert. You bet I found out about it and that I got a ticket!

I don’t know what my readers’ political beliefs are or if you guys even like Obama, but I’ll tell everyone about it after the rally. They’re allowing cameras, so you bet I’ll be taking photos up the wazoo!

Hope to have good news later. Talk to you soon.